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Critique Service

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Critique Service

 

This one is tricky. Read the directions.

 

If you are in the early stages of writing your book, then this is not for you. I can't help someone with an embryonic early draft or who's not gotten past chapter two.  It's not ready.

You should join a writing workshop and finish the book first. You need a long term critique group, not me.

 


 

If you've had your finished book workshopped, shown it to family and friends, maybe to other writers, and while they may love it, you've got the nagging feeling that there's still some work to do on it yet.

Perhaps you've been sending the first 3 chapters & synopsis to the appropriate agents and publishers who have similar books out. No one's nibbling at your masterpiece. You don't know why, and they're not sharing.

I've been there and done that!

If you knew what was wrong, you'd fix the problems and try, try again.

Rejections happen for a reason. Whatever the reason, an editor usually spots it right away in the opening pages. She doesn't have the time to explain why, just sends a polite (one would hope!) form rejection and moves on to the next submission in the slush pile.

 


 

If that sounds familiar, then I'll look at your opening pages. Not your prologue, but the opening pages of the first chapter.

You may not like what you hear, but I will be honest. I'll tell you the same thing an acquisitions editor would tell you.

Make sure to clean up obvious problems: use the spell check and correct punctuation. Manuscripts get rejected because of basics like that. Writers who think a great story will overcome such details never sell books.

 


 

Critique Rates

 

My opinion is free, but my time to write one is worth money.

Cost is .0075 a word, 1500 word minimum, no more than 2000 words.

That's about 6-8 double-spaced manuscript pages.

Industry definition of a "page" is 250 words. It never comes out quite that neatly, so I charge by the word.

So your rate will be $11.25-$15.00

A 1,557-word submission will be $11.67.

No, do not include the title or your name in the count.

Round off to the end of a sentence, don't stop in the middle just to get the 1500-word minimum. It's just 75% of a penny, after all. ;-)

I'll need to look at your synopsis, which should be formatted to:

  • 2-3 page single-space
  • double-space between paragraphs
  • 1-inch margins
  • 12-point font (I prefer Times New Roman

That's industry standard, so don't shrink to fit. If your synopsis won't fit, rework it until it does.

No charge for my reading the synopsis. Include it as a separate file.

Critiques are confidential.

Your file is deleted when the critique is completed.

 


 

Don't think that 1500 words is a fair enough length? Think again. Most books sell from the first page, sometimes from the first line.

If you hook a reader on those first pages, they will follow you through to the end of the book and demand more.

In the original opening for Bloodlist I had the main character slowly waking on a beach, staggering around confused for about five pages, and then he got hit by a car.

Little wonder it collected a box of rejections. Books and stories that begin with a character waking up is a tired trope. Avoid it.

However, when I rewrote with the character being hit by a car in the very first line, then getting up to tell his tale, the book sold.

I tell new writers to open their book in such a way as to make an eyesore, tired, and hungry editor so involved in the story that she misses her subway stop home. Do that and you've got a good chance to make a sale.

Think of how YOU read books. Editors do.

Do we curl up with a hot drink and our favorite music playing softly in the background with hours of unbroken reading time before us?

Nope.

We're reading on the fly to distract us from our surroundings. We squeeze it in during lunch, waiting in lines, during commercial breaks. Few of us ever get to just settle down and focus on a book.

Write the kind of book that you love to read, something that offers escape, that compels readers to steal time to finish it. Have them cursing you for keeping them up all night to see what happens next!

During the London Blitz, when people huddled in subway tunnels, cold, scared, bombs falling, destroying whole neighborhoods and wiping out their homes and lives, the most popular books of the time were Agatha Christie mysteries. They offered escape. Her books are still doing that.

That's the kind of book an editor wants!

Write one!

 



Submission Process:

Query first to mystikmerchant@sbcglobal.net  with the subject header Critique Service.

State how many words, what genre.

Ask questions! It's totally okay!

First chapter openings only.

No excerpts from the middle of the book.

I'll send you a Paypal invoice. You pay that and send the submission + the synopsis and I'll have a look at them and get back to you as soon as possible.

 

I critique what I'm familiar with in commercial fiction:

  • Science Fiction & Fantasy
  • Steampunk
  • Urban Fantasy
  • Paranormal
  • Young Adult (in the above genres)
  • Romance
  • Erotica   (M/F only)
  • Historical (includes westerns)
  • Mystery / Thriller / Suspense

 

DO NOT SEND:

  • Fan fiction of any kind
  • Prologues
  • Query letters / letters to the editor
  • Horror
  • Poetry
  • Porn of any kind
  • Children's books / picture books
  • Autobiography / personal journey
  • Film scripts / play scripts
  • Literary fiction
  • Essays / term papers / office reports
  • Scientific papers
  • Inspirational / religious
  • Rants against your ex-partner/boss/whatever
  • Political anything

 

At some point I might offer in-depth critiques for longer works, but not just yet. Let's see how this goes first!

 

P.N. Elrod

 


Rookie Mistakes

 

Thinking that the spell checker is for wimps.

Telling, not showing  --  that's the biggie!

Opening with a data dump of back story.

Opening with the main character waking up.

Double negative points if MC wakes in a white room.

Triple negative points if MC wakes in a white room with a data dump of how he got there.

Introducing too many characters / geographical names in too few pages, along with what they look like and their bios.

Nothing interesting happens until page 10 / chapter two / ever.

Introducing a thoroughly unlikable or annoying character as your hero/heroine. Even Hannibal Lector possessed a weird sort of charm!

Introducing a thoroughly dull, ordinary main character with nothing to make us want to follow him through 400 pages.

Writing in the present tense. Few writers can pull it off.

Lovingly detailed descriptions of ordinary rooms. Unless an 800-lb gorilla is wrecking the joint and there's a body stuffed up the chimney, skip the inventory.

Main characters with unbelievably exotic names (what were their parents thinking/smoking?) and a host of super powers so they can save the world without breaking a sweat. Triple negative points if they're also rock stars.

An opening line that should be in the Bulwar-Lytton Worst First Sentence Contest.

Writing to a trend, rather than writing something you're passionate about.

 

 

If any of that looks familiar, consider a rewrite!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Copyright 2011 P.N. Elrod